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An anthology
Of work by unknown authors
Includes this poem:

I don't know my name.
Evidently I've shame, but
No identity,
Personality,
It all means so little now
If I can't be called
And who would be blamed?
I do wish I knew my name,
I do wish I knew...
Identify me,
Call me whatever you want!
I need to be known.
It's common, you see,
We all crave recognition.
Call me what you will!
Call me anything!
Is that not a solution?
This you can do, so
I beg of you,
Identify me, I need
A name of my own.

There are no pictures,
Yet one can imagine
The faceless author,
He whose sole plea is
To have an identity,
He who has not one.
The anthology
Is placed back upon its shelf,
Almost out of reach.
He says to himself,
"My greatest work," the poet
Whose face isn't seen.
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2010/10/04

It's all in haiku and a little rough around the edges, but I like the idea of this. :)
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:iconkleomenes:
I like the image of the unnamed poet. I only wish that you could easily count onji or morae in English to make proper haiku
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~AnUndefinedRomance Jul 13, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yes, thank you! Therefore, all English haiku fails. D:
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:iconxeari:
Oh wow, that's cool. I didn't notice the haiku, but I did feel a rhythm. I thought of rap, which is cool when it isn't about stupid things. This is about something very interesting. I love the irony.
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~AnUndefinedRomance Jun 15, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Why, thank you! Yep, this isn't a standard haiku poem at all, I just integrated the 5-7-5 syllable scheme (but didn't break the stanzas where I should have, it wouldn't look right to me). The exact syllables do give way for some rhythm, so I can understand why you thought of rap. There's a lot of short phrases and quick sentences.
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:iconxeari:
The thing I like about rap is the syncopation - when the beginning of a phrase doesn't start at the predicted first beat. It gives it a really neat feel. It's just that a lot of rap seems to talk about shallow, unimportant things, and that makes me sad.
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~LostInVagueClarity Apr 11, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Your name is Jade. Silly.
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~AnUndefinedRomance Apr 12, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:) It is indeed.
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